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Old 10-04-2014, 03:51 PM
Dooley67 Dooley67 is offline
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Swimmboy,

I really like your story to this point. You are able to create a feeling of anxiety as the exam is going on so that the reader really feels it. The nonverbal interplay between Derek and Jake is really done well, especially because we know Derek's thoughts as you have written them, but we can only wonder what Jake is thinking; but we do know what he's feeling. I look forward to the next installment - thanks for posting the story.

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