Swimmboy,
You really captured the forgiving nature of Derek and the sincerity and naïveté of Kirk in the first installment of the story. I like the way Derek's raw need for revenge is portrayed and his subsequent initial disbelief when Kirk says he is truly sorry. I also thought you did a good job of showing Derek's influence with Jake who he convinces of the truth to what Kirk has said. Looking forward to the next installment.
D67
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