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Old 08-19-2014, 04:15 PM
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STS,

You've done it again, created a wonderful lead up to the tryouts for Jimmy with awesome dialogue and narration. Jimmy's sexual awakening bringing him past the brink is so well done because it maintains the sensuality without having any of the typical graphic language. I'm very impressed with Greg's dedication to mentoring Jimmy and also Monique's ability to be like a big sister to Jimmy, giving him good advice along the way. I also like the way you brought Jack back into the picture, portraying him as a really nice guy who has the knack for relating to someone 2 generations behind him and uses his life experience to help Jimmy with his problem with Abby. I think Jack is pleased that he has been a part of Jimmy's growth. Thanks again and waiting for more.

D67
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